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I had this concept in mind for quite a while. It's not connected that closely to the mythology, I was rather thinking about narcissism as a behavior disorder.

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Critique by Peace-In-Violence Peace-In-Violence/critique/1489212695">Mar 6, 2017, 1:38:26 PM
Hey there, here I am with another review for you. I hope it proves as useful as the last one.
Let's deal with the character's pose first. While its beautifully drawn, I feel like its a touch wonky. For instance she appears to be leaning against the tree which should lead to a general sense of relaxation but her right leg is filled with tension because of how its foot is pushing upward. The second difficulty lies with how she's sitting ( this second one is a very minor qualm so feel free to ignore it). Since she's leaning to the side, she should be sitting more on the side of her hip rather than the flat of her butt. Of the two difficulties, the only one I think poses a true problem is the first. Judging from you description, she's staring at her reflection in the water and the flowers suggest that she's been doing so for some time. This means that she's entranced and so she'd largely forget about the world around her, even to some extent her own body. In short, she should be sitting without any hint of tension or muscle usage since both require thought and she's not really thinking right now. The quick fix that I'd suggest is to just place the right foot flat of the ground. As for my more in depth solution, I'd take the left leg and point it's knee toward the bottom left corner of the canvas, maybe having the thigh follow along with the river bank a little. As for the right leg, I'd have it placed more like her left one, though the knee would point more toward the bottom center of the canvas. This position would make her lean more heavily against the tree but that's okay. As for her right arm,( since its no longer being supported by the leg) consider having it reach out a little as if to interact with her reflection in the water. This wouldn't count as tension because it a very sleepy gesture and she's interacting with the object that's ensnared her attention. As a last note, this pose creates a nice flow of motion that's lead our eyes to the thing that's ensnared her attention.
The next difficult is that tree she's leaning against. Currently its painted like its apart of the background when it should be the apart of the foreground ( this is largely a mater of personal style though, so feel free to ignore me). Continuing with the tree, we have a slight discrepancy because it's roots are well defined with lights and darks, the problem is that the moment your roots meet the truck there's a sharp change in detail that draws a physical line. You can run with the shift if you wan to, but consider making it a gradual change.
Okay, we're almost done. My last qualm is with the flowers. I think they're stealing attention from the woman, their size and vibrant colors are claiming that they're the center piece (if I'm not mistaken the true center piece is the woman staring at her reflection). On a secondary note, they fight the motion of the piece a little. She's making a nice, smooth curve toward the top right but all the flowers are pointing toward the top center. The quickest fix is to decrease their size somewhat. The slightly more complicate fix is to have them follow along with her figure more, (maybe curve around limbs) so that they join the general sense of motion. If nothing else, decrease their numbers a little and replace them with a swath of tall grass (not all the flowers, just those you weeded out).
I've got two quick suggestions for you. Number one, show her refection in the water.
Number two, show some little baby flowers. This creates a sense of difference in the picture as well as more accurately depicting the the natural growth of things.
And we're done. It may feel like I nit-picked the piece (sorry if I did, that wasn't my intention) but I want you to know that I think its really good. Its a very cool, calm piece that poses a nice contrast to all the bright, loud and violent piece running around.
I hope this critique helps in some small way and if not...then I blame the cannon ball that just tore through my living room.
May you always walk hand in hand with goodluck.
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Chrystinator Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist
frumos
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dottys-friend Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely drawing!
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TEAofeyes Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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dottys-friend Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome!
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DSonne Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice!
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:iconteaofeyes:
TEAofeyes Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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:iconzakuro-kona:
Zakuro-Kona Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017   Traditional Artist
This is really gorgeous :love:
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:iconteaofeyes:
TEAofeyes Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you so much <3
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carlos-salva-art Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
 Fav fella (Badge) Yes fella ( Message ) Super!-fella-(messages) Awesome!-fella-(messages)
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TEAofeyes Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
Llama Emoji-03 (Sparkles) [V1] 
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carlos-salva-art Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
Handshake :handshake: :handshake: Hug
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:iconwintersbird:
Wintersbird Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2017
Very beautiful! Exceptional motive and great colouring  :)
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:iconteaofeyes:
TEAofeyes Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you so much :)
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:iconmister-23:
Mister-23 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017   Digital Artist
Attractive washes of color here.
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:iconteaofeyes:
TEAofeyes Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you so much :)
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:iconmister-23:
Mister-23 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017   Digital Artist
Don't sweat it.
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Sketchman147 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2017   Traditional Artist
This is a serious case, at least since she's covered with flowers. :XD:
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